Worst Lunch Ever
One lovely day us lions were sleeping in the hot sun until some buffalo's came to annoy us so, we decided to attack them. Then we thought we could eat this baby calf for LUNCH. So we crept along the river bank and pounced on the herd of buffalo sending them into a frenzy like they were a scaredy cat with a dog. We dragged the baby calf in the water.
When we got the baby calf out of the water he was soaking wet. We had a visitor for lunch, his name was Mr Crocodile and he got very greedy with lunch, so we played tug of war and the one that wins gets lunch. Luckily we got to have lunch today unlike the big fat greedy crocodile.
But then a herd of buffalos came to get their baby calf back from us. BAM! I got hit in the ear by one of the buffalo and the calf was gone. I wondered why one of the buffaloes hit me in the ear like a butterfly.
Luckily we got away but we were so HUNGRY. We got chased away by the big buffaloes. It was the most scary bit in my whole life. Us lions got back safely but hurt really bad, but we will get that baby calf one day, well, we will all try.
By Josef
Awesome josef, you have a good amount of description and a good amount of hummer as well. But maby next time you can write a bit more but anyway keep up the great work.
ReplyDeleteThanks for your feedback Aiden!
DeleteMagnificent work Josef I liked how you added words like Bam and crept, I think you should write a little more writing but you also did a lot of good description writing and the rest is awesome and keep up the great work.
ReplyDeleteThanks for your feedback Isabella!
Deleteawesome work josef. I like how you sied Luckily we got to have lunch today unlike the big fat greedy crocodile.
ReplyDeleteThanks for your replied Hayden
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